I Shall Not Get Drunk Today

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Hey Dale, a few notes. I have to run so I haven't checked all the accents, mostly just wanted to mention quote typo and shall. Later

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I shall not get drunk today,
I haven’t the money anyway, I have no money anyway?
a half week before pay day, still half a week before payday?
and as I open up the frig,
I spy behind the lemon fizz,
just one small and tiny beer,
pretending it’s not even there,
“I’m invisible it seems to say.” “I’m invisible," it seems to say.
No, I shall not get drunk today.
I really like that tiny beer, and all of the above. "Will" instead of "shall"would ground the poem. Shall sounds more full of it to me, which may be why you chose it.


There’s yard work that I need do,
a big pile of doggie poo,
tools left by… I don’t know who.
When I open the garage door,
I see messy messes here galore, I don't know what you where thinking with messy messes.
sitting there upon the floor,
today I think I won’t be bored, I like this, as if boredom was the reason for drinking.
and in my will I will not sway.
No, I shall not get drunk today.

I’m going good, worked up a sweat,
though I’m not nearly half done yet,
but soon I think, yes soon I’ll bet.
Overheated, yes I think,
a glass of water from the sink,
opening the frig I say “Oh dear!”
Without a pal, there is that beer,
friends he needs to make him cheer’,
so to the store I’ll make my way.
“God damn! I shall get drunk today!”




This isn't worth a serious work-shopping, but there is plenty wrong with it. Poor thing, needs someone's help. Inspired by the poem of the day(though not nearly so good), "Ballade of Suicide" by G. K. Chesterton. His is in five, mine barely makes four.

–Erthona

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