control

[Todd]

Hi, a couple minor things that stood out to me

control -Version 2 (Thanks all for edits)

2:50 a.m.
the words just flow--just feels like an unneeded throwaway here and at the end.
crookedly, but at least they're there
and i bow down to the darkness
of 2:52 a.m.
for giving me some semblance
of light--while I like how these last four lines read I wonder if they are too at odds with your title--I realize there's some irony in it, but the speaker approaches the moment as a supplicant. I'm probably not making much sense
in the form of letters, perhaps--The hesitation seems a bit much. I'd be tempted to cut perhaps and pull up "but still"
but still, something shines
at this time of the night
or the morning, the power
of being there when the numbers change
it feels like control--This is an interesting idea sort of like an anorexia of time.
2:52 a.m.
the words just dance
and i am a puppeteer