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[SuicidalBlueJay]

I don't feel that I exist
I feel like the slipped disc of a
solar eclipse
But because the darkness groans like someone left too long alone,
I feel the painful sting
which means, alas,
that I persist

Hmmm. I'm new to poetry so I'm hesitant to be harsh on poems. I like your poem because I can relate to the pain of existence. At least I get that sort of vibe from your poem. cheerio then!