05-10-2014, 03:06 PM
Hello Eugene,
I see that you have tried to mirror a sense of chaos or disorder with a haphazard poem structure. Instead, you may consider better structure while the content of the poem relays the sense of disarray. Also, the repetition of "Me?" does little to reinforce the theme of vanity, however a good refrain used sparingly could provide for that.
Basic Meter
I see that you have tried to mirror a sense of chaos or disorder with a haphazard poem structure. Instead, you may consider better structure while the content of the poem relays the sense of disarray. Also, the repetition of "Me?" does little to reinforce the theme of vanity, however a good refrain used sparingly could provide for that.
Basic Meter
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