The Fires of Two

[problybombed]

Its funny I read your first paragraph all of a sudden i didn't need to read much more. Your poems rhyme structure was exactly what I dig and appreciate. So many people get caught up following a structurization that they loose their own identity and personality...I would suggest focus more on content that sets up the ur last word you rhyme with, at times it seemed a bit too much- example(intertwine down thru mind seems like forced rhymes) focus more on content than words