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Bifurcation
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05-08-2014, 08:02 PM
I really enjoyed some of the lines in this poem, particularly 'eyes for embers and mouth for mirror', but there were also some others that could be improved. Beneath the shade of unsung trees is almost a bit too fantasy novel-esque, I feel.
As ChristopherSea said above, there are some easy grammar mistakes to fix as well. B |
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Bifurcation - by expiring_touch - 04-24-2014, 10:58 AM
RE: Bifurcation - by Mopkins - 04-24-2014, 11:31 PM
RE: Bifurcation - by ChristopherSea - 04-25-2014, 12:09 AM
RE: Bifurcation - by benno_422 - 05-08-2014, 08:02 PM
RE: Bifurcation - by Erthona - 05-08-2014, 09:47 PM
RE: Bifurcation - by LorettaYoung - 05-11-2014, 11:26 PM
RE: Bifurcation - by Kaldwin - 05-18-2014, 09:09 PM
RE: Bifurcation - by abu nuwas - 05-18-2014, 10:21 PM
RE: Bifurcation - by QDeathstar - 05-24-2014, 12:48 PM
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