05-08-2014, 06:51 AM
You should have roughly the same amount of syllables per line, just in the first stanza you varied from 6 to 8 syllables per line. That tells you this is not metered correctly. Read the following
meter
Dale
meter
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.