05-07-2014, 10:19 AM
Actually I guessed "encouragement" after Billy(who was also struck, or stroked down also), of course I said other things which got me struck from the thread. So "encouragement" is fairly close to what you are saying, the problem is the way you are saying it. Some of your wording lends itself to lampooning.
What is this naked thing,
That cannot walk alone?
travels hand in hand with me,
So small and weak and bold?
With neither house nor home,
around the world does roam.
seeks a fragile ally...
You ask the question, "What is this naked thing" then follow it up with lines that can be interpreted as innuendo.
Generally, I would recommend staying away from the question, in my experience it is a rhetorical device that does not seem to work well in poetry.
Dale
What is this naked thing,
That cannot walk alone?
travels hand in hand with me,
So small and weak and bold?
With neither house nor home,
around the world does roam.
seeks a fragile ally...
You ask the question, "What is this naked thing" then follow it up with lines that can be interpreted as innuendo.
Generally, I would recommend staying away from the question, in my experience it is a rhetorical device that does not seem to work well in poetry.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.