Finitude- poem

[Nbafan]

Just curious, what is the speaker's sorrow about? The loss of love? Or the loss of a loved one to death.

If this is from real life, I'm glad that you didn't embrace your "finiteness", a phrase which I find compelling.

Hi Caleb,

A girl- a frustrating relationship or, in actuality, a relationship that hasn't begun. Essentially, getting stuck as a 'best friend.'

And yes, it is from real life. Recent life.

Best,

Will

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Hi all,
I am so sorry for not responding until now. I have been very busy with studies. Tests, papers, etc. I really appreciate all the excellent feedback you have provided- I have reworked certain parts of the poem and believe it helped, so thanks! The end, I know its a cliche but I am still not sure what to do about it, so I have left it the same. Hopefully this revised version actually is better:

Finitude

I stand above Highway 281,
watching bright lights
approach and pass
Blurred by a veil of tears.

It’s April now,
It’s been four months,
and yet the pain
will not fade.

I want it to end
but know it won’t.
Not by Life,
only by Death.

Just as each day must
have its dawn,
so too each day must
have its dusk.

I edge forward,
step upon the ledge,
ready to embrace
my finiteness.

But an image of you
forms itself within
my feeble mind.
Flawed perfection.

And I step away
and realize that
despite my sorrow,
despite my pain,

You make my life
worth living.