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05-05-2014, 09:57 AM

i agree with shem [on the break at groans]
i don't think the line break on the slipped disc line helps any as it feels unnatural when read aloud.
and i'd reinforce ellajams point about not needing [but because]

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Untitled - by poe - 05-04-2014, 03:48 AM

RE: Untitled - by heslopian - 05-04-2014, 04:05 AM

RE: Untitled - by Caleb Murdock - 05-04-2014, 04:22 AM

RE: Untitled - by billy - 05-04-2014, 09:33 AM

RE: Untitled - by ellajam - 05-04-2014, 07:32 PM

RE: Untitled - by LorettaYoung - 05-05-2014, 02:27 AM

RE: Untitled - by poe - 05-05-2014, 03:30 AM

RE: Untitled - by shemthepenman - 05-05-2014, 04:29 AM

RE: Untitled - by billy - 05-05-2014, 09:57 AM

RE: Untitled - by poe - 05-10-2014, 06:15 AM

RE: Untitled - by HitchBitch - 05-11-2014, 11:25 PM

RE: Untitled - by RSaba - 05-12-2014, 12:37 AM

RE: Untitled - by poe - 05-14-2014, 07:47 AM

RE: Untitled - by rowens - 05-12-2014, 06:27 AM

RE: Untitled - by Erthona - 05-12-2014, 06:55 AM

RE: Untitled - by SuicidalBlueJay - 05-12-2014, 11:14 AM

RE: Untitled - by tectak - 05-12-2014, 11:23 PM

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