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[poe]

Thanks for all your critiques. This is an old poem, I think @1989. I've added more punctuation. And also removed one of the three "feels". Thanks again. I dunno, is it better? Still searching for a title. Right now the only thing I can think of is, Stand.
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Stand

I don't want to exist.
I feel like the slipped disc of a
solar eclipse.
But, because the darkness groans like someone left too long alone,
I feel the painful sting.
Which means, alas,
that I persist.




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I don't feel that i exist
I feel like the slipped disc of a solar eclipse
But because the darkness groans like someone left too long alone,
I feel the painful sting
which means, alas,
that I persist