What is this Naked Thing?
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(05-02-2014, 07:01 AM)Willpark Wrote:  What is this naked thing?

What is this naked thing,
That cannot walk alone?
Yet when travels hand in hand with me,
Carries mountains on its own.

What is this naked thing,
So small and weak and bold?
Who desires only friendship
Could not care much less for gold.

What is this naked thing,
With neither house nor home,
So proudly walks with man to man,
And around the world does roam.

And seeks a fragile ally,
To lift up off the ground,
And does so swift and easy,
Without great pomp or sound.

It lives in the silence,
And stillness of the air
And lives in friendship undeserved
And in unrequited care.

What is this naked thing,
That loves for loves own sake.
Perhaps it is some kind of god,
Or dreams that walk in wake.
Hi ,
I have resisted the pull of this one because have little idea of what you are striving to make unclear. The capitalisation of each line is an unnecessary additional irritation which just makes the thing harder to read...and if that is your intention I must ask why?
I will not bother you with duplicated comments but add that the whole thing is redolent of the contra-indicated punctuation of that grand ballad title..."What is this thing called, Love?
Help.
Best, tectak
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Messages In This Thread
What is this Naked Thing? - by Willpark - 05-02-2014, 07:01 AM
RE: What is this Naked Thing? - by Brownlie - 05-02-2014, 02:56 PM
RE: What is this Naked Thing? - by milo - 05-03-2014, 12:51 AM
RE: What is this Naked Thing? - by billy - 05-04-2014, 08:04 AM
RE: What is this Naked Thing? - by LorettaYoung - 05-05-2014, 12:55 AM
RE: What is this Naked Thing? - by tectak - 05-05-2014, 02:18 AM
RE: What is this Naked Thing? - by 71degrees - 05-05-2014, 11:03 AM
RE: What is this Naked Thing? - by Willpark - 05-05-2014, 12:36 PM
RE: What is this Naked Thing? - by tectak - 05-05-2014, 03:18 PM
RE: What is this Naked Thing? - by Brownlie - 05-05-2014, 03:38 PM
RE: What is this Naked Thing? - by ChristopherSea - 05-05-2014, 06:36 PM
RE: What is this Naked Thing? - by Willpark - 05-07-2014, 09:38 AM
RE: What is this Naked Thing? - by Erthona - 05-07-2014, 10:19 AM



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