Henry's Room

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Hi, Mark, I think the edit is an improvement. The site's preferred way to post an edit is to edit your OP and place the labeled edit above your original. This helps readers critique the current version and compare the two.

Jeez, those capitals and lack of punctuation were annoying. Edit:

Henry's Room (at Walden Pond)

I did not dare step into Henry’s room.
Where standing stones define the boundary,
with chains between the stones, except for two.

His footsteps there were footsteps not for me.
Perhaps I would if Henry was still here,
then two would make much better company.

I walked around the edge so very near,
around the bricks where heat did once pass through,
back to the front, where chains did not appear.

And there I stopped and did enjoy the view,
I did not dare step into Henry’s room.