Traffic Jam through Condiment County

[Brownlie]

Well, we'd all love to live up to some unrealistic standard but that's not always the case. I like the pun in the title.

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I locked eyes with the roadblock
as my trolley insisted we keep turning left.

He was sticky and salty, red and loud and
leaking between me and the deli. --hmm... I miss things sometimes not sure though.

So I reversed, but not before
I understood him, not before
I gave the secret handshake of a nod
that comes with being children in an adult world,

not before I realised that he was the one truly bound
by the finitude of language. -- Well you see it's all a matter of contorting the forces of the monistic universe towards a masculine glory.

He looked back to his mother
and gave her another insufficient look

called “I hate the hypocrisy
exhibited in our household”, -- Aha! the comma goes inside the quote, also I think you need a comma after called.

called “You Machiavel, you Ice-Queen,
you embarrassment of a relation,” -- Tupac says mac-a-vel-I, repeatedly! Maybe use a synonym for called unless you want the repetition.

called “Sure, yoghurt’s tasty, - I see you've added some culture here!
but so is Nutella.”

I'm not sure how to critique this one.