Body Language
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(05-02-2014, 05:59 AM)expiring_touch Wrote:  haha I loved it. I like the contrast between the vocab in the beginning and the end, that kind of snaps you out of reverie. My only suggestion would be to change 'who's' to 'whose'.
Thanks for the read, I'm glad you liked it; and good catch there.
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Body Language - by Wjames - 05-02-2014, 05:52 AM
RE: Body Language - by expiring_touch - 05-02-2014, 05:59 AM
RE: Body Language - by Wjames - 05-02-2014, 06:04 AM



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