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Seasons
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05-02-2014, 05:37 AM
I think this a nice poem, with some simple and heart warming imagery. It flows nicely, but I would suggest shifting 'softly' after inhale, up on the second line. It also has some nice alliterations, (smoke-slithers) and inner rhymes (creek-twist), that make the symbolism all the more enjoyable.
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RE: Seasons - by paxsan - 05-01-2014, 11:44 PM
RE: Seasons - by Bunx - 05-02-2014, 01:01 AM
RE: Seasons - by expiring_touch - 05-02-2014, 05:37 AM
RE: Seasons - by Markworth - 05-03-2014, 11:44 AM
RE: Seasons - by Bunx - 05-03-2014, 11:31 PM
RE: Seasons - by bbcashdollar - 05-08-2014, 02:10 AM
RE: Seasons - by Bunx - 05-08-2014, 02:35 AM
RE: Seasons - by SuicidalBlueJay - 05-12-2014, 11:18 PM
RE: Seasons - by tectak - 05-13-2014, 12:11 AM
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