05-01-2014, 08:20 AM
Hi, Matt, welcome. 
I like the idea of this, but I'm wonderiing why you wouldn't just say:
I did not dare step into Henry's room.
If you'd go through and untwist some of those awkward lines I think you'd have some improvement.
If you post at least 5 thoughtful comments on poems in the workshops you can have this moved there.
Good luck with it.
I like the idea of this, but I'm wonderiing why you wouldn't just say:
I did not dare step into Henry's room.
If you'd go through and untwist some of those awkward lines I think you'd have some improvement.
If you post at least 5 thoughtful comments on poems in the workshops you can have this moved there.
Good luck with it.
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