04-29-2014, 12:31 PM
I like how it feels like the student is in the middle of a forest- or at least it did to me.
A few things that seemed odd: not sure about "follicle ideas" although I understood what you meant. "White-soled", just need that dash. Maybe a period after "her body won't let her."
That last stanza really brings the piece together... I enjoyed this a lot.
A few things that seemed odd: not sure about "follicle ideas" although I understood what you meant. "White-soled", just need that dash. Maybe a period after "her body won't let her."
That last stanza really brings the piece together... I enjoyed this a lot.
Let's put Rowdy on top of the TV and see which one of us can throw a hat on him first. 
