violent sunrise on the island

[Wjames]

A poem I wrote after a Long Beach (on Vancouver Island) trip. Looking for feedback/criticism on, like, everything! I've never been on a site that gives actual feedback and I really appreciate how things work here. . Fire away

This is Version #3

Violent Sunrise on the Island

As the white moon roared over the mountains
and the black sky slid toward the sea
my silent footsteps screamed these words at me- I like this line better without "at me"
a violent sunrise is on the way,
and nature's never been
more dear to me
than now.
I answered back, threw my thoughts
across the sand
and shattered them on the horizon,
watched them fall among the trees near shore
and heard the roots beneath me somehow rustle.
Foreign land shifted around me,
and I felt glorious and alone.
The blue sun rose from the water,
the waves crashed over my feet,
and the violent sunrise was over, I think you could find a better word than "over" to end this line with, especially considering you used it in the line before. I would use something like "calm".
leaving daylight,
clear skies
and me.

Those are the only two "cents" I have to offer, do with them what you will; it's already a great poem as is. I really like your stuff, I followed you on the deepunderground (which is really not a very good poetry site), and I'm glad to see you over here.