Entitled #1 (and his Realtime Monologue)
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(04-28-2014, 09:20 PM)ChristopherSea Wrote:  I like the flow, brevity and image herein. The 'Sur round' and 'a void' seem a little gimmicky. The ocean is hardly a void when it comes to the natural history of any island. It supplies all of the resources for island populations. In fact, coconuts are ubiquitous due to their dispersal on seas and transportability by ship. However, I assume your void is more of image. Do you mean that a baby's midnight is hidden because they are always asleep at the hour? ...and why is the ocean so? Some things to think about perhaps in your next edit. Cheers/Chris
I will come back to this as I am unsure of which soul/sole you mean.
En passant see Soul Trader, 2011, tectak this site.
Image wise I believe you struggle a little but there is a cameo in this which needs the light of day...as did mineSmile

Best,
tectak
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RE: The Sole Traders - by RiverNotch - 04-28-2014, 09:04 PM
RE: The Sole Traders - by ChristopherSea - 04-28-2014, 09:20 PM
RE: The Sole Traders - by tectak - 04-28-2014, 09:46 PM
RE: The Sole Traders - by Willpark - 04-29-2014, 12:26 PM
RE: The Sole Traders V2 (Untitled) - by tectak - 05-02-2014, 09:48 PM



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