04-24-2014, 08:38 PM
Hey, I am a watercolor painter and a poet too. Welcome 
You have some nice alliteration in that first line. I like the irony, humor and impact that second line had and how it turned about on yourself. Experimenting out of the 5-7-5 confines may be worthwhile. All the rave with the Haiku purists. For example you could strike the 'me' or 'now' or both. 
Good luck here. Poetry and painting are very complementary. All the best in your pursuit of them both./Chris
You have some nice alliteration in that first line. I like the irony, humor and impact that second line had and how it turned about on yourself. Experimenting out of the 5-7-5 confines may be worthwhile. All the rave with the Haiku purists. For example you could strike the 'me' or 'now' or both. Good luck here. Poetry and painting are very complementary. All the best in your pursuit of them both./Chris
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris