The Daimon -edited

[Mopkins]

hello and thanks for taking the time to crit this. It's still a very rough draft, as I only finished it the other night, and I'm useless at editing fresh work, so all input is welcome and appreciated. You make a good point about the form, I'm so used to writing everything in 14 syllable lines that it didn't occur to me that it may not be appropriate. Meters not my strong point either, I'm still a newb when it come to scanning my work... so your comments about that are appreciated.

Cheers


Marianne