04-21-2014, 09:29 AM
This line seems a bit off "Yet chained in links of iron dollar signs".
For my taste the poem seems a tad grandiloquent, although at times you have some clever phrases, such as :
" faithless soul who’s fated to be lost
a lifetime in a world of counting cost,"
Best,
Dale
For my taste the poem seems a tad grandiloquent, although at times you have some clever phrases, such as :
" faithless soul who’s fated to be lost
a lifetime in a world of counting cost,"
Best,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.