Introspection Stays Home -edited

[Brownlie]

Hi Brownlie,

I do tend to use 'and' a lot - something I'm now trying to get out of the habit of doing. This is an old one I thought I'd edit with the help of the members here. What's wrong with using 'it' at the end of a line? (I'm not the best at grammar) I agree 'catch the morning sunshine and canary melody is a bit off... but I needed to introduce the bird somehow in that line for the next to make any sense. Thanks for reading and commenting.

Hi Tony,

thanks for commenting, the canary is there as a comparison to Rosemary, they are both obsessed with themselves.


Hi 71Degrees

You're not the first to tell me off for so many 'and's and I try not to do it these days. Too early in the morning for me to attempt an edit yet, but I'll try to break up the long sentences. Thanks for the input


Marianne

I would criticize using it because the last word in a line is more emphasized by the reader. Because it is such an ambiguous word it doesn't give the reader much to think about. However, one may be able to justify the use.