Go on sad one

[Brownlie]

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My main issue with this poem is that I know you are capable of going into greater depth with your content.

Go on sad one,
Go on and play,
Go on sad one,
Turn night to day.

Seek joy and fun,
Please do not stray
Show everyone,
Your merry way.

Go on sad one,
Go on! Now play!
It’s not for you,
Though come what may.

For don’t you know
What is your place?
If pained inside,
Still smile on face. --- The syntax is awkward here.


Go on sad one,
While yet still day,-the syntax is also awkward here.

‘fore darkness falls,-- Fore seems somewhat archaic

upon your grave. --
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Interesting end note

–Erthona

Those are just my comments and please take in mind that I haven't slept well in a couple of days.