To my Self
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We see through a mirror darkly? Although a bit Sartre-like, as in "No Exit" it lacks anything that the reader can attach to, in order to become involved or care about what is happening. Emotionally it is very sterile.

Just for consistencies sake, not because it would correct the problems stated above, I would use "I" instead of "we", as it is jut the speaker who is in this room. It is one of the core existential maxims/problems you restate here, but one that has no solution, or as Sartre would say "No Exist".

Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?

The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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To my Self - by Am I A Poet? - 04-18-2014, 02:17 AM
RE: To my Self - by Erthona - 04-18-2014, 03:16 AM
RE: To my Self - by Am I A Poet? - 04-18-2014, 04:52 AM
RE: To my Self - by John Galt - 04-18-2014, 04:09 AM
RE: To my Self - by Erthona - 04-18-2014, 08:08 AM
RE: To my Self - by Am I A Poet? - 04-18-2014, 09:15 AM



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