The Guy in Apartment 33

[JakMak]

Ok, that will need to be completely revised...
It was 10 syllables long, but what makes it iambic is that every other syllable is a "hard" syllable correct?

Get yourself a copy of Paradise Lost. By the time you finish it (thousands of lines), the rhythm of blank iambic pentameter verse will have you marching to the beat. I like how your story itself has a metrical quality.

thanks, yeah, i was confused over what made something iambic, so i made each line 10 syllables lol, thats probably the metric quality you found... thanks for the read and feedback man

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Ok, that will need to be completely revised...
It was 10 syllables long, but what makes it iambic is that every other syllable is a "hard" syllable correct?

yep -an iamb is da DUM - you have it correct in some lines -

The ap/pari/tion watched/ the clock/ again
daDUM daDUM daDUM daDUM daDUM

I'm having fun getting the hang of it too, Good luck to you



Marianne

thanks, it took me forever to figure out what this da DUM business was, which i did, with some excellent help and pure tenacity, I kept wandering why they wanted me to sing to my syllables lol :p I'm actually really surprised how much fun it is playing with iambs, dictyals (whatever they're called DUM da da) and trochees... getting them all in order to make meaning is a good challenge