NaPM April 15 2014

[ChristopherSea]

This reminded me of the scifi novel/movie, 'Fantastic Journey', one through your own body. It is an interesting take on the theme with a humorous twist. Sorry about the flood. Hopefully, your livestock didn't drown in their half of the house.

Hi Chris - thanks for sharing your thoughts...I can see the fantastic journey connection, I did not intend any images for water floods or a humerous twist...I was obviously trying to be too subtle with my images (was aiming for the difficultis of the journey from bed to sofa for someone with cronic sciatica). Based on your read i think a drastic re-write might be called for. But your read was still valid and interesting, I can see where you have picked up your thoughts.

Yes, I got all of that struggle with chronic back ache and the painful 'journey' through the house, but I took the penultimate stanza as a flood in the lower level and her giving up with a sense of humor in the absurdity of the confounded problem (lumbago and house flood). Nonetheless, I did sense a trip through the protagonist's agonized body, especially with the detail that you used in the extended geological metaphor. Also, when I looked up long house, I saw that the lower level was used to house livestock.