Black Widow

[tectak]

She sits amid her silken treads,
hapless victims to ensnare.
An hourglass portends their fate,
a widows kiss awaits them there.

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Fire away. I know poems don't have to rhyme, it just worked out that way. One minor thing I'm not sure of... "a" or "the" to begin the last line?
Of course, I expect major things as well

Thanks,

Moose

I realise that this is not in the serious workshopping forum but in spite of it being terse-verse it is suitably packaged for transport there.
As it stands, the possessive "widow's kiss" seems to excite the poetic passion pundits more than the simplistic and statemental nature of the piece...it is a singular observation with no attempt to hoodwink the reader.
For my part I could see the theatrical caesura of a semi-colon after "fate", but there are opportunities for mischief....like:

She sits amidST black, silken threads,
a hapless victim to ensnare.
An hour-glass portends his fate;
a widow's kiss awaits him there.

It is a VERY short piece, so small changes can make a big difference. Your poem. The himness humanises the piece.
This is me liking it...not a lottle as it's little. Rhyme is like powered flight, when it happens, you wonder why it took so long to achieve.
Best,
tectak

Thanks, tectak.
So, "himness humanises the piece," which I get. When Erthona first suggested the "him," I didn't like it for that reason, but it grew on me. Should it be humanised? I like the semi-colon, but not so much "amidst," and the threads aren't black

Again, gracias.

As aways, your poem. "Amidst" is an acceptable variant on "amid" but it adds a soft sibilance with " She sitS amidST..."
The "black" threads allude...widow, black, rags, threads blah blah. Just me.
As to the humanising, it is but a rakish glance at the next metaphorical allusion, milo will kill me after erthona has murdered me, but "him" is not confined to humanity...although it should be...we call our pets him,he,she,her...BUT in this case is only alludes. Acceptable by repetition as you began with "she" then opted for the uncommited "their".
Best,
tectak

See Robert Frost's Design. Maybe you already have but its got a spider in it.

No, I hadn't, but I have now. Thanks!