04-10-2014, 09:29 AM
Ballad meter with the iambic tetrameter line and iambic trimeter line combine into one seven foot line, with rhyming couplets.
There are a few lines that seem a bit off like:
L4 If you read "tired" as a diphthong like tie-erd, with the stress on the "tie" it works, if as single syllable as we do in Texas "tard" it doesn't. As Australia is larger than my country of Texas, I'll give the "tie" to you.
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L18 "So are you then a genius to say you have Him sussed?"
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L19 "I'm Proud to say that I know God much better that my Peers -" "than" not "that"
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I enjoyed the rhyme of circumambulation and contraption, plus the double entendre in circumambulation.
I think less a witch/cannibal and more an angel (although at points she does seem ceeepy, but maybe she is just otherworldly). That is over looking the fact that she may be as she presents herself, simply crazy, and the point is even a crazy lady has more sense than a "Doctrine Pedlar". I see the veal, which with several other things seems a bit ad hoc, either for meter or rhyme, so I think more that than an indication of cannibalism. If it were a religious pun, it would need to be mutton as in the phrase. "like lambs to the slaughter." even granting the golden calf statement "Surpassing all the Golden Calves you find in human hearts!".
However, I too would be interested in the "veal for tea" comment as to me it is nonsensical, although I am unsure if "veal for tea" means the same as "veal with tea:, even so...
Dale
There are a few lines that seem a bit off like:
L4 If you read "tired" as a diphthong like tie-erd, with the stress on the "tie" it works, if as single syllable as we do in Texas "tard" it doesn't. As Australia is larger than my country of Texas, I'll give the "tie" to you.
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L18 "So are you then a genius to say
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L19 "I'm Proud to say that I know God much better that
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I enjoyed the rhyme of circumambulation and contraption, plus the double entendre in circumambulation.
I think less a witch/cannibal and more an angel (although at points she does seem ceeepy, but maybe she is just otherworldly). That is over looking the fact that she may be as she presents herself, simply crazy, and the point is even a crazy lady has more sense than a "Doctrine Pedlar". I see the veal, which with several other things seems a bit ad hoc, either for meter or rhyme, so I think more that than an indication of cannibalism. If it were a religious pun, it would need to be mutton as in the phrase. "like lambs to the slaughter." even granting the golden calf statement "Surpassing all the Golden Calves you find in human hearts!".
However, I too would be interested in the "veal for tea" comment as to me it is nonsensical, although I am unsure if "veal for tea" means the same as "veal with tea:, even so...
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.