04-08-2014, 02:03 PM
Chris,
Chris wrote: "Hey, getting back to the poem edit above, what about my explanation for the use of 'dawn's'. Does it wash for you? "
Not really unless Dawn possesses the Canterbury Bells. In this last version I would suggest a comma after dawn, and remove the comma from Bells. As:
"Nearing dawn, Canterbury Bells
with Monkshood shrouding eyes,
back to the possessive dawn.
Are the "Canterbury Bells" not with the "Monkshood" watching false dawn?
Unless "Dawn" is a girl who owns said "Canterbury Bells", I see no way this is possessive. Unless, the "Canterbury Bells" are an attribute of the dawn, as in "the dawn's early light."
Dale
Chris wrote: "Hey, getting back to the poem edit above, what about my explanation for the use of 'dawn's'. Does it wash for you? "
Not really unless Dawn possesses the Canterbury Bells. In this last version I would suggest a comma after dawn, and remove the comma from Bells. As:
"Nearing dawn, Canterbury Bells
with Monkshood shrouding eyes,
back to the possessive dawn.
Are the "Canterbury Bells" not with the "Monkshood" watching false dawn?
Unless "Dawn" is a girl who owns said "Canterbury Bells", I see no way this is possessive. Unless, the "Canterbury Bells" are an attribute of the dawn, as in "the dawn's early light."
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.