First limerick attempt
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Once a drunkard possessin' great odor
Would find some raunchy lass of no candor.
They'd stagger home to the woods
At night for beer, steak and “goods”
No surprise, then, once woke he with a real cur.

Kindo, tectak's example does have the 9-9-6-6-9 meter that is preferred. This would sound better thusly;

A drunkard possessin' great odor
found some raunchy lass with no candor
staggered home through the woods
for a beer, steak and “goods”
No surprise to find her a realtor
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris
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Messages In This Thread
First limerick attempt - by kindofahippy - 04-07-2014, 11:34 PM
RE: First limerick attempt - by tectak - 04-08-2014, 01:34 AM
RE: First limerick attempt - by Erthona - 04-08-2014, 01:55 AM
RE: First limerick attempt - by milo - 04-08-2014, 02:23 AM
RE: First limerick attempt - by tectak - 04-08-2014, 04:07 AM
RE: First limerick attempt - by kindofahippy - 04-08-2014, 02:19 AM
RE: First limerick attempt - by ChristopherSea - 04-08-2014, 04:19 AM
RE: First limerick attempt - by Erthona - 04-08-2014, 04:25 AM
RE: First limerick attempt - by milo - 04-08-2014, 04:46 AM
RE: First limerick attempt - by ChristopherSea - 04-08-2014, 04:46 AM
RE: First limerick attempt - by Demon™ - 04-08-2014, 07:37 PM
RE: First limerick attempt - by Am I A Poet? - 04-18-2014, 08:36 AM
RE: First limerick attempt - by Brownlie - 04-18-2014, 08:59 AM



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