04-08-2014, 03:11 AM
(04-08-2014, 02:35 AM)kindofahippy Wrote: When once your as poor as a dust bunny
And nothing in life seems so funny
Just look at the masses
With their higher taxes
And imagine them drowning in honey
that's better that the last one... try matching your meter in lines 1,2 & 5 - and matching the meter in lines 3&4 for a better rhythmical effect. Sing aloud what you've written to see if the meter is okay.