Last words...

Last words...

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#15

04-07-2014, 07:20 PM

I recommend not using so many pronouns and replace some lines with impersonal sentences. To me it sounds really overloaded with "I", "you", "we" and "my". Impersonal sentences can solve this problem and moreover decorate your poem with different phrases

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Last words... - by Ghassan - 07-27-2013, 10:05 PM

RE: Last words... - by rowens - 07-27-2013, 10:13 PM

RE: Last words... - by Ghassan - 07-27-2013, 10:15 PM

RE: Last words... - by Malu - 09-13-2013, 03:46 PM

RE: Last words... - by rowens - 07-27-2013, 10:20 PM

RE: Last words... - by Ghassan - 07-27-2013, 10:22 PM

RE: Last words... - by jdguyb - 07-28-2013, 03:55 AM

RE: Last words... - by Ghassan - 07-28-2013, 04:06 AM

RE: Last words... - by ellajam - 09-13-2013, 10:25 PM

RE: Last words... - by nhanna1223 - 02-03-2014, 02:07 AM

RE: Last words... - by LickinLyrics - 02-03-2014, 07:26 AM

RE: Last words... - by denniswilson - 04-07-2014, 05:36 AM

RE: Last words... - by Erthona - 04-07-2014, 06:02 AM

RE: Last words... - by kindofahippy - 04-07-2014, 01:34 PM

RE: Last words... - by California - 04-07-2014, 07:20 PM

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