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[micpschm]

You've got some really cool concepts, and it certainly evokes the feeling of confusion and uncertainty.

The questions, well, I think are a little of excessive. I would of liked to have a little more imagery, maybe create an image of what your confusion or uncertainty looks like to you.

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I’ve thought I had It.
I’ve felt It before,
The incredible rush of a great goal,
That first kiss,
"Man did I kill that math exam,"
But is any of that It?
What am I working toward?

This line works at pinning your emotion to some physicality, but you briefly skim over it. Maybe something towards the lines of this?

The incredible rush of a great goal:
A first kiss - her soft lips embracing mine,
cherry lipstick tattoo'd on my cheek
as forever as It is temporary . . .
a cold sore - my only reminder,
But is any of this it?
What am I working toward?

You should probably change some of this, it's just a quickly drawn out example.
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Also, be careful with your lines. Some of your lines are exceedingly long, yet others fall short.

Thank you for the response! I agree about the questions as well, reading it back they seem like too much. Something I hadn't thought of were your comments on imagery, and I'll be sure to include more imagery in future poems/revisions. Thanks again for posting, appreciate the feedback.