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I Wished I Was The Water -edited

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04-07-2014, 05:10 AM

(04-07-2014, 03:24 AM)Mopkins Wrote: hello thoughtjotter - thanks for commenting.

you make a good point 'how' doesn't really seem to go when I re-read it. Can't think of any improvement off the top of my head...I'll have to think about it.

thanks again for your suggestions

Sorry I did not post correctly, I'll get there eventually.

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I Wished I Was The Water -edited - by Mopkins - 04-06-2014, 07:44 PM

RE: The Shower - by ellajam - 04-06-2014, 10:15 PM

RE: The Shower - by Mopkins - 04-06-2014, 10:36 PM

RE: The Shower - by Thoughtjotter - 04-07-2014, 03:07 AM

RE: The Shower - by Mopkins - 04-07-2014, 03:24 AM

RE: The Shower - by Thoughtjotter - 04-07-2014, 05:10 AM

RE: The Shower - by California - 04-07-2014, 08:00 PM

RE: The Shower - by Mopkins - 04-07-2014, 08:47 PM

RE: The Shower - by California - 04-07-2014, 08:55 PM

RE: The Shower - by Mopkins - 04-07-2014, 09:04 PM

RE: The Shower - by Erthona - 04-07-2014, 10:33 PM

RE: The Shower - by kindofahippy - 04-07-2014, 10:47 PM

RE: The Shower - by Mopkins - 04-07-2014, 11:04 PM

RE: The Shower - by kindofahippy - 04-08-2014, 12:01 AM

RE: The Shower - by Mopkins - 04-08-2014, 12:19 AM

RE: The Shower -edited - by Mopkins - 04-25-2014, 02:24 PM

RE: The Shower -edited - by billy - 04-25-2014, 05:19 PM

RE: I Wished I Was The Water -edited - by Gestalt222 - 04-26-2014, 01:34 AM

RE: The Shower -edited - by Mopkins - 04-25-2014, 05:33 PM

RE: The Shower -edited - by shenaz - 04-25-2014, 06:32 PM

RE: The Shower -edited - by Mopkins - 04-25-2014, 06:37 PM

RE: I Wished I Was The Water -edited - by Mopkins - 04-26-2014, 01:08 PM

RE: I Wished I Was The Water -edited - by aerickson - 04-30-2014, 01:57 AM

RE: I Wished I Was The Water -edited - by Mopkins - 04-30-2014, 12:38 PM

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