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[Burlesque3Rogue]

There was once a young childish man
Who loved science and got dirty hands.
Until he met this lady,
Elegant, pretty, a little nerdy.
All he wishes for are her hands.




My second attempt at poem using limerick. Any advise really helps to improve my poetic techniques

To be honest I don't think that this works very well as a limerick as the format is completely off. I do however think that if you work a little bit more on the rhythm and expand it a bit it could be a wonderful story poem.

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