The Demigod of Death (Moved) Graphic Violence within

[Burlesque3Rogue]

A mod please delete the previous version in the mild critique forum, I think it makes more sense here as I AM a novice.
Anyway,

My fourth poem ever, I clapped the rhythm again, and I think it helped me get another good metre going.

The Demigod of Death

I slyly emerge, It's so deceivingly devious,
You fall for the Trojan, and that mistake is your first,
One friend is my knife, and he will stab with obedience,
My acquaintance is Hades and we will each take a turn!

I am partly a human; a demon’s living inside,
Lucifer can’t even comprehend my contriving!
I plan it so meticulous, your ligaments sliced,
So exact with X acto's, your throat so fragile for dicing!

Let me describe what I do, if you can bear the synopsis,
See, the moon brings my movement, become a shadowy figure,
In your view I am looming, I have no care for your comments,
From the darkness arisen, in my position I’ll injure!

I am the scariest and, don’t go preparing a plan,
'Cause I am the Shepard and you’re barely a lamb!

I'm in two minds about this, although I really enjoyed it I do feel that there could be some tweakage regarding the flow. Also there are one or two spelling/grammatical errors that need fixing (I know that many people don't see it as a big deal but to me the more spelling mistakes the less intelligent you sound). I do however enjoy the mythological references.

Keep going, it has good potential.

Xx