04-01-2014, 11:04 AM
There is a fair amount of unintended ambiguity:
"Our past rings in my heart." Did you have them surgically implanted?
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The rhyming is inconsistent, and where it appears it seems forced.
"While stagnation is my life
You find the groove
Like the edge is to the knife."
"You find the groove like the edge is to the knife." Does that sentence make sense to you? groove and edge are opposites.
A similar phrase would be "You find the light like the blackness of night."
Best,
dale
"Our past rings in my heart." Did you have them surgically implanted?
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The rhyming is inconsistent, and where it appears it seems forced.
"While stagnation is my life
You find the groove
Like the edge is to the knife."
"You find the groove like the edge is to the knife." Does that sentence make sense to you? groove and edge are opposites.
A similar phrase would be "You find the light like the blackness of night."
Best,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.