So Kind

[ChristopherSea]

Chris,

" Hey, do you think making the line break after 'out' would illuminate that more? "

Maybe, I've had it both ways, this just happened to be the way it was when I posted it. Tomorrow might have been different. I think I left it this was because I wanted the caesura between "what was hers"....."and what was mine". Like weighing two items in your hands, trying to figure which is heaviest. I think that's what I was doing

(Actually my main concern was if this was too long to post here)


Thanks for the comments,

Dale

No, it's not too long. Yes, the hers/his break is needed, but you could do that too:

when she separated out,
what was hers

and what was mine.

you know...