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[ellajam]

There was once a young childish man
Who loved science and got dirty hands.
Until he met this lady,
Elegant, pretty, a little nerdy.
All he wishes for are her hands.




My second attempt at poem using limerick. Any advise really helps to improve my poetic techniques

Hi skylande, welcome.

A limerick should have a regular meter with an aabba rhyme scheme. Your poem doesn't fit these requirements, but I'm sure you could edit it to make it work.

Here's an example from a limerick thread on site.

billy wrote:
When Vincent van Gogh lost an ear,
the state of his mind wasn't clear.
He made an impression
to teach her a lesson;
he should have just stuck to the beer.

His jabberwock came in a flash.
The jubjub flew in with panache.
Was he so erudite,
or just talking shite;
or did he write nonsense for cash?

Good luck with it.