03-23-2014, 10:14 PM
I received this critique:
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(03-21-2014, 10:47 AM)Erthona Wrote: Marcella,Right now, I can see that most lines have three stresses, but they are not regular. Would I have to pick a meter and stick to it or are any three stresses enough to make this work? All I have now is accidental accentual verse,
This is mostly in trimeter in accentual verse isn't it? I count mostly three accents per line.
Just listen to the first two lines.
Started as a lark,
morphed into a monster
as there is only incidental rhyme, it's a shame not to follow that pattern all the way through. As you are not end rhyming, it doesn't get singsong. There are a number of reasons I like accentual verse, but one is that it has a earthiness about it, hearth and home, and all that.
Dale
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