03-23-2014, 09:44 PM
(03-23-2014, 06:56 PM)billy Wrote: It reads as very list like and doesn't really give me anything to get into, flesh it out a little or make it more accessible.Thank you for your comments Billy. I guess there is a bit of room between being too wordy and a list.
I was also trying to avoid clichés, playing too safe!! I have put up my first edit .
