A Coming Storm

A Coming Storm

chrisgas
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03-21-2014, 04:25 AM

Could I suggest "on leaden skies" rather than "of leaden lakes". "I think that you have set the scene for your metaphor of cannibalised by ego and pride", as with any machine building industrial nation ego and pride exists.

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A Coming Storm - by metalfan91 - 03-18-2014, 05:41 AM

RE: A Coming Storm - by Deaf Cat in the Blue Hat - 03-19-2014, 02:55 AM

RE: A Coming Storm - by metalfan91 - 03-19-2014, 12:10 PM

RE: A Coming Storm - by halfagirl - 03-20-2014, 04:16 AM

RE: A Coming Storm - by chrisgas - 03-20-2014, 07:34 AM

RE: A Coming Storm - by chrisgas - 03-21-2014, 04:25 AM

RE: A Coming Storm - by zeke97 - 03-21-2014, 06:11 AM

RE: A Coming Storm - by metalfan91 - 03-21-2014, 10:12 AM

RE: A Coming Storm - by metalfan91 - 03-23-2014, 07:30 AM

RE: A Coming Storm - by alatos - 03-26-2014, 02:58 AM

RE: A Coming Storm - by aerickson - 04-30-2014, 02:24 AM

RE: A Coming Storm - by metalfan91 - 05-30-2014, 03:22 PM

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