03-20-2014, 04:45 AM
Thank you for your comments. This is the first poem I've written in my adult life and am ready for feedback. I made some edits based on your comments and my own processing of what I wrote. Here is version two:
consume
my eyeballs eat the words off pages / screens / everything
my ears hear your silence louder than your words (you still slay me with
those)
my mouth opens wide to judge the entrances and exits
my skin soaks up sunlight while bearing scars of this life
create
it is all in my mind
the blank page screams to be filled and my stomach clenches
you are not good enough / you wasted your time
destroy
smash me into pieces so I can pick them up
throw away the outliers and the assholes
remake
become whole again, repeat.
consume
my eyeballs eat the words off pages / screens / everything
my ears hear your silence louder than your words (you still slay me with
those)
my mouth opens wide to judge the entrances and exits
my skin soaks up sunlight while bearing scars of this life
create
it is all in my mind
the blank page screams to be filled and my stomach clenches
you are not good enough / you wasted your time
destroy
smash me into pieces so I can pick them up
throw away the outliers and the assholes
remake
become whole again, repeat.