03-20-2014, 04:33 AM
consume
my eyeballs eat the words off pages / screens / everything
my ears hear your silence louder than your words (but you still slay me
with those too)
Do you want still and too?
my mouth opens wide and judge the entrances and exits
What is doing the judging?
my skin soaks up sunlight and bears the scars of this life
That comes off a little weak, maybe.
create
it is all in my mind
the blank page screams to be filled and causes physical pain
That's a simple but direct line. I'll give you that.
you are not good enough / you wasted your time
destroy
smash me into pieces so I can pick them up
throw away the outliers and the assholes
remake
become whole again, repeat.
The pieces and the process make the poem interesting. You could probably make it stronger. What do you think?
my eyeballs eat the words off pages / screens / everything
my ears hear your silence louder than your words (but you still slay me
with those too)
Do you want still and too?
my mouth opens wide and judge the entrances and exits
What is doing the judging?
my skin soaks up sunlight and bears the scars of this life
That comes off a little weak, maybe.
create
it is all in my mind
the blank page screams to be filled and causes physical pain
That's a simple but direct line. I'll give you that.
you are not good enough / you wasted your time
destroy
smash me into pieces so I can pick them up
throw away the outliers and the assholes
remake
become whole again, repeat.
The pieces and the process make the poem interesting. You could probably make it stronger. What do you think?