03-19-2014, 11:36 PM
(03-19-2014, 08:20 PM)ChristopherSea Wrote: Lovely image and a sensual piece. In the spirit of the form's brevity you could add a comma after night and drop: with, still, a. Thanks for the read.More in tune w/5-7-5 now. Not a must, but something my Writers' Group tries to adhere to when we finish a session.\
Thanks.
Listening to you
last night, your brown hair still damp:
a lovely word bath

