03-17-2014, 05:32 AM
I like the last line a lot, it throws up a few connotations, Are you walking next to a river?.
Are the earbuds only broken in the physical sense and still emitting music, and the water is mixed in to the music like frogs or sheep can be for instance?. Even if you used "ocean" the connotations would be the same for me exept it would also throw up the image. The questions were to myself, just thinking outloud ya know....JG
PS, I like your parody of Basho's famous haiku.
Are the earbuds only broken in the physical sense and still emitting music, and the water is mixed in to the music like frogs or sheep can be for instance?. Even if you used "ocean" the connotations would be the same for me exept it would also throw up the image. The questions were to myself, just thinking outloud ya know....JG
PS, I like your parody of Basho's famous haiku.