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[John Galt]

KK, your clarity was good, the poem had a (read it all before feel) to me because of the words used. IE. All the verse below.

"A shimmering pearl
Fell out the corner
Of my eye.
As If on cue,
the others cascaded
down my cheeks like a flowing waterfall".

There is no life in the poem, try for a richer imagery that can let me enter the poem so that I can feel what you felt.

Thank you....JG