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[geoff]

thanks to all for a variety of fast and helpful responses!

tomoffing

-thanks for your time and kind words. I'll have a look at bumbling" for sure, as well as the line breaks.


Chris
-I'll take a look at the title; adjusting it could lessen some of that confusion you encountered initially. For now, I'm not sure if I want to reorder the lines in the first stanza to switch the "bereavement." I'll also examine the rhymes at the end to see if I want to adjust. Thanks so much for letting me know how you connected with the piece/ your interpretation

milo
-going to take some time to consider your points. The ones that I am aiming to tackle most involve line breaks, punctuation, and referencing. Thanks for your thorough feedback and time

jeremy
thanks for the kind words and for letting me know your interpretation! I found it all very helpful. I'll consider your "sanitize-sterilize" suggestion

tec
haha I knew the line breaks would get to you, and these are slightly longer in places that I prefer usually. I'll take a look, but if there are specific lines that got to you most, I'd like to know which. thank you for taking the time to read and respond

abu
you expressed a lot of my own thoughts when writing the piece and when reading others' feedback. I appreciate your words and time